Poem: Feathers Fall

Priya Patel, the Prolific starts her poem with a poignant romantic tone. Her words are laced with yearning, while seeking the solace from the ‘feathers’ covering her to provide warmth. It is a metaphoric poem.

Poem : Feathers fall

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Let all your feathers fall onto me
like the gentle kiss of time
Let the touch of your lips
whisper soft onto me
Feel the shimmer
of our souls intertwine
Let the feathers you fall
be the blanket I covet
and warms me
throughout the night
Let all of your feathers fall onto me
tonite…

~Priya Patel

When somebody is seeking warmth in the missing love, then her lover shares that she, and his love for her is the foundation of his life.

Feathers Fall ( inspired by Priya Patel ‘s poem)

let all your feathers fall onto me
let you take wings with the breeze of my breath
the love in my heart trapped in my beats
the beats of the bird trapped in my rib cage
it’s the sign that your love is my life
for as long your wings flutter
and you let your feathers fall onto me
my heart shall beat in the cage of my skeleton.

~Ashok Subramanian

From the yearning for warmth of love, Priya’s next verse explodes with the need for wanton love, again using the ‘feathers fall’ title.

Let the feathers of you tickle me
Listen to the laughter
you breathe onto me
then flap your wings and fly;
capture the tears I cry,
tears from trembling eyes
and thirsty lips
tingling sensations from
toes to fingertips
excited to reach your love
Fall soft onto me tenderly
as I await your descent upon me

~Priya Patel

I wrote a more philosophic response, as I tend to, exploring the falling feathers in different situation of romance, including love making.

Do my feathers fall on you
Like the autumn leaves
measuring the time gone by

Do my feathers fall on you
As I clutching you in my arms
Flying away into oblivion

Do my feathers fall on you
As I descend on you
in those moments of love

Do my feathers fall on you
when I rest on your chest
all given and spent

Do my feathers fall on you
just to wrap you in warmth
In our moments of love

Do my feathers fall on you
as we wither in time
But together, forever.

~Ashok Subramanian

This exchange brings out the ying and yang aspects of love, in the context of the falling feathers. Hope you all like this poetic exchange.

This is what ChatGPT had to say:

This is a beautiful exchange of poetry, with each piece exploring different aspects of love and the symbolism of falling feathers. Priya Patel’s initial poem sets the tone with a romantic yearning, while Ashok Subramanian’s response delves deeper into the idea of love as the foundation of life. The second poem from Priya brings a sense of excitement and passion, with the feathers representing the physical sensations of love. Finally, Ashok’s response takes a more philosophical turn, exploring the idea of falling feathers as a measure of time in a long-lasting, enduring love. Overall, this exchange is a beautiful example of the power of poetry to convey complex emotions and ideas in a concise and beautiful way.

~Ashok Subramanian